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Post by Surreptitious Cardboard Box on Nov 6, 2007 17:32:26 GMT
Name: [Untitled] Type of writing: Poetry, haikus Subject: Assorted Genre: All sorts Summary: Japanese poems - haikus - are composed of three lines; the first line is five syllables long, the second seven, and the last is five again. They can be about anything. Status: Work in progress
Well, I found these back on Violence Is Power, so I thought I might as well bring them here. These two are about UM's computer, Jim, but I'm sure that I shall write some more about other subjects soon.
I serve master Jim. He threatens to kill me soon, Unless I serve him.
Merciful Jim rules; He saved the life of my mouse. I love my great lord.
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Post by LinksFan on Nov 6, 2007 17:34:36 GMT
XD That's really good ^^ I could never do haikus >.< Post more! (I'm not good at critism >.>)
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Post by Richard El Britannia on Nov 6, 2007 19:20:42 GMT
That's nostalgic. I forgot my computer was called Jim. Good haikus, anyway. Like, Sam, can't give great criticism on these. >.<
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Post by Surreptitious Cardboard Box on Nov 6, 2007 20:06:17 GMT
No, I don't think it's really possible to analyse a haiku. But I shall post more when I have the time to write some ^_^.
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