My haikus

[Surreptitious Cardboard Box]

Name: [Untitled]
Type of writing: Poetry, haikus
Subject: Assorted
Genre: All sorts
Summary: Japanese poems - haikus - are composed of three lines; the first line is five syllables long, the second seven, and the last is five again. They can be about anything.
Status: Work in progress

Well, I found these back on Violence Is Power, so I thought I might as well bring them here. These two are about UM's computer, Jim, but I'm sure that I shall write some more about other subjects soon.

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I serve master Jim.
He threatens to kill me soon,
Unless I serve him.

Merciful Jim rules;
He saved the life of my mouse.
I love my great lord.

[LinksFan]

XD That's really good ^^
I could never do haikus >.<
Post more!
(I'm not good at critism >.>)

[Richard El Britannia]

That's nostalgic.
I forgot my computer was called Jim.

Good haikus, anyway. Like, Sam, can't give great criticism on these. >.<

[Surreptitious Cardboard Box]

No, I don't think it's really possible to analyse a haiku. But I shall post more when I have the time to write some ^_^.